In two days I am heading to high school and start a new journey.
My hands are shaking and I start breathing heavily. Every time I think about it, my hands get all sweaty and I can see more sweat dripping down my face. It was finally the first day of high school, I started to get cold feet about going to high school. My heart is rapidly beating in my chest, I started to feel sick as I enter my first class room.
As I sat down, I felt dizzy and everything I see was a burr.
W.A.L.T... use "show not tell"
In class we had to think about a feeling and we had to think how we can imply it, instead of just telling them.
What did you infer from reading my writing?
What I found easy: thinking of a feeling
What I found hard: finding out how I can imply it
What I could do next time: add more sentences in my writing
Hi Lance,
ReplyDeleteWhat I inferred from your writing was that you were anxious in your story. maybe next time you could re read over some of your sentences because I thought in you first sentence instead of using and start a new journey it would sound better if you said to start a new journey. Other than that I really like the way your story has taken place I'm looking forward to seeing your next blog post.