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Thursday, 5 July 2018

Forbidden Car

The Forbidden Car


It was a dark and foggy evening, Mr Bean and the three kids went out to explore the forest and see if there is any abandoned McDonald’s. They got prepared and traveled through the forest. After 30 minutes the three kids were starving so they started to see things like unicorns and a fat guy eating a burger. They keep traveling deeper into the forest and the deeper they go the more strange things they see. A homeless guy appeared and he gave them a key but they weren’t sure what opens it so Mr Bean gave it back and kept on walking. Another 30 minutes past and while they’re walking they see the homeless guy again trying to give them the key but they keep refusing him. After 10 times refusing the homeless guy they took the key and tried to find out what opens it.


2 hours have past and they found a random car that crashed into a tree. They went to see if anything is inside so they wiped the window but the dust was too thick and couldn’t be rubbed off. Mr Bean tried the key and it worked so they opened the door and saw a happy meal box. They opened the happy meal and there was a dead rat beside a half eaten patty. (woosh) something went past behind them, so they turned around and no one was there. They hear screaming from all angles then they couldn’t take it anymore so they ran and ran to find the homeless guy so they can ask him about the car. They kept traveling until their legs couldn’t run anymore and they stopped hearing the scream but they saw a young girl with a white dress. They said “hello” but the girl didn’t respond, instead she walked away. She kept walking until she was behind a tree then she disappeared out of nowhere and the homeless guy appeared again.


They went to the homeless guy and asked him questions about the key and the car that opened it. The homeless guy said that “ I gave you the key because I wanted you to release the ghost inside it”. Everyone was frightened then they started to hear the screaming again and saw the girl heading towards them. Mr Bean and the three kids picked up a stick and tried to fight the girl but when they striked it went straight through her. All of them knew that she wasn’t a normal girl instead she is a GHOST, they said to themself “how is this possible and how can they see her?”. The ghost kept on screaming and chasing Mr bean and the kids to their house. Mr Bean closed all the doors and locked the kids in a safe room but Mr Bean didn’t know where to hide so he went to his bed and hid underneath his blanket.


The ghost slowly went up the stairs then went to Mr Bean’s room looking for the Key, Mr Bean was scared for his life and when the ghost was near, he wet his bed. The ghost found the key and went to the forest to find the car that had a picture inside it. The picture was a young girl with a smile on his face, Mr Bean looked at the picture and he said to the ghost “is that you?”. The ghost nodded her head then said “I used to live here but then I passed away because I went to the forest to find a bird but a huge branch fell on me” Mr Bean knows now that the girl is peaceful so he let the boys free and the girl went back to the forest. The kids said to Mr Bean “is it dinner time” so Mr Bean got the phone and ordered pizza. Mr Bean said to the kids while they were eating pizza “the forest is dangerous and never go there without me” the kids nodded their heads.


The End…


Credits


Characters
Mr Bean-Lance P
The Three Kids-Lance P
The Ghost/Girl-Lance P
Homeless Guy-Lance P


Visual Settings
Lance P

What I found Hard: Think of what to write
What I found Easy: Thinking of the characters (my favorite is Mr Bean)
What I will do next time: Make it more interesting

1 comment:

  1. Hi Lance,

    I really liked how your story was thrilling for the readers. I could imagine a girl with a white dress on while reading your story and I think she looked really scary. Overall, your story is interesting but maybe next time identify what tense you are really using. Great work!

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